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BEFORE

Urbanity’s New Mission Statement

Urbanity Dance is pushing the limits of contemporary technique, the result is aesthetically raw and unpredictable movement. Dancers build on a foundation of ballet, modern and jazz to successfully alternate between lyrical fluidity and quirky minimalism. Advocating for a fresh approach to dance and a new genre for open-minded, life-long learners, the Urbanity aesthetic is an experiment in increasing physical intelligence. Believing in the essential symbiosis of community and art, Urbanity’s work with Boston Public Schools is strengthening neighborhoods and economy. Trained dancers are known for their versatility and ‘sharp adaptability,’ discovering joy through the challenging array of movement. Also fostering life-long choreographers, dancers are encouraged to professionally produce their work. Performances are deeply provocative yet visually and audibly stimulating, promoting accessibility to wide-ranging ages and interests.

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Urbanity Dance’s Mission

Urbanity Dance aspires to push the limits of contemporary dance technique, striving to inspire audiences with its edgy artistry and startling unpredictability of movement. Building on a rich foundation of classical ballet and modern dance, the Company seeks to combine lyrical fluidity with a jazzy economy of expression. Advocating a fresh and imaginative approach to dance, the Urbanity aesthetic is an exciting experiment in elevating physical intelligence.

Our trained dancers are lifelong learners chosen for their sharp adaptability as well as dancing prowess and are encouraged to professionally choreograph their work.

Believing in the creative interplay between art and community, Urbanity in its ongoing work with Boston Public Schools supports neighborhood collaboration and the constructive channeling of vitality, especially fostering life enhancement for young people through dance and movement. We also offer an annual college scholarship to a talented student.

Celebrating a cosmopolitan sensibility, Urbanity Dance is dedicated to providing provocative, visually arresting, and musically stimulating performances for diverse audiences of all ages.


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Vision and Values

Urbanity Dance will continue to value the entwined nature of humanity with movement. The company will establish a new language for movement through the world of dance. This language will be the basis upon which our goals will flourish. We hope to artistically enrich (and be enriched by) our community, both locally in Boston and internationally and earn a repertoire and reputation that is respected among artists. The Urbanity aesthetic understands that attending live theater is a generous act in the 21st century and will, therefore, aspire to create entertaining, multi-sensory experiences in each performance. Creation within these performances will spring from a variety of sources from collaborations with talented composers to choreographed pieces from company members. Thus, Urbanity will never cease to revisit and reimagine the stylistic accomplishments that can occur in the world of dance. Work within the community, including workshops for inner-city schools and growing scholarship support, will repair the ruptured human sinew of our time, connecting physical intelligence to the much under-valued asset of imagination.

AFTER

Urbanity Dance places supreme value on the essential human desire for self-expression through movement. Performing innovative dance at home in Boston as well as on stages around the world, the Company aims to enact its own characteristic yet evolving artistic language that is creatively acclaimed.

Appreciating the attendance of live dance as a generous act in the mediated 21st century, we offer audiences a challenging, entertaining, and visionary experience. Multisensory works spring from collaborations with talented composers, in commissioning choreographed pieces from Company members, and by never ceasing to actively reimagine the stylistic accomplishments that mark the dance repertoire.

Our hope is to aesthetically enrichand to be enriched bythe community we are so integrally a part of. Drawing on the resources of our supporters, we are motivated in turn to run dance workshops in inner-city schools and to provide scholarship funds for deserving students.

For it is the dream of Urbanity Dance to help repair the ruptured body politic of our time by embodying intelligence and imagination in uplifting dance engagements.


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1.       Urban HumanityWe want to bring the joy and power of movement to our audience. Dance is about celebrating human emotions and acknowledging humanity; every time we dance, we acknowledge one another and our audience.

2.       Urban InsanityWhat happens when we let disorder resonate? Finding peace with disorder. Organized chaos. Raw. Construction. Metal. Mechanical. Scaffolds. Quirkiness. Being comfortable with random spasms.

3.       Urban ProfanityProfanity can be a word, expression, gesture, or other social behavior that is interpreted as insulting, rude or vulgar. What does our culture consider offensive or profane? What is the context and what is the point of the language or action? Does it make a difference? When do we as a community need to feel okay with being challenged and seeing things outside of our comfort zone? Is it ever our social responsibility to be profane or deviant?

4.       Urban OrganityLive performance art has the power to move us in powerful ways. It has potential to deeply affect change and personal growth. As we dance, movement energy flows through the dancers, cycles to the audience and back to the dancers in an organic, shared experience. Realizing the dream of dance as a most sublime of human arts. The body as art and as that which connects us, the internet of sinew, webbed fingers and toes, engaging the brain as a network of connections, high and low, in and out, belonging.

5.       Urban VitalityLive performance can deeply affect the vitality of a city, engaging diverse populations and enacting lively streets of strong character.

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1.       Urban HumanityWe want to bring the joy and power of expressive movement to our audience. Dance is about celebrating emotionality and acknowledging the universality of human experience. Every time we dance, we connect to our fellow human beings and embody the archetypal forces of life.

2.       Urban InsanityWhat happens when we let disorder resonate? Finding beauty in disorder. Organized chaos. Rawness. Construction. Metal and mettle. Mechanical movements. Scaffolds. Quirkiness. Being comfortable with mysterious spasms.

3.       Urban ProfanityProfanity can be a word, expression, gesture, or other social utterance that is interpreted as insulting, rude, or vulgar. What does our culture consider offensive or profane? What is the context of and point of such language or behavior? Does its utterance make a difference? When do we as a community need to undergo challenges to our comfort zone? Is it ever our social responsibility to be profane or deviant?

4.       Urban OrganityLive performance art has the power to move us in fundamental ways, effecting deep change. As we dance, movement energy flows through dancers to members of the audience and cycles back to dancers in an organic, shared experience. Realizing the dream of dance as a most sublime human art. Embodied dance as that which connects us in a sinewy web of webbed fingers and toes, networking minds high and low, in and out, creating belonging.

5.       Urban VitalityLive performance can deeply affect the vitality of a city, engaging diverse populations and enacting lively streets of strong characters.


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Julia Zerounian’s voice is as warm and glowing as her personality.  The welcome she extends to her audience, immediately establishing an atmosphere of enthusiasm and intimacy, is enough to make her a charming and infectious entertainer.  But she is much more.  This is a real artist who knowingly and lovingly shapes every phrase and colors of every tone in order to bring out the maximum of feeling in a song.  Whether the mood is light hearted or passionate or something in-between, she passes effortlessly from one to the other, and all are important to her.  With a repertoire ranging over many ethnic groups, languages (she sings in ten different languages) and styles, you might think the authentic moments would be reserved for the Armenian melodies.  But the Russian (romance and gypsy songs), French (Aznavour, Piaf, Brel), Greek, Persian songs, and Latin tunes, not to speak of classics from the American Song Book, are delivered with equal conviction, authority, and heart. 

AFTER

Singing effortlessly in ten languages, the charming and elegant Julia Zerounian restores to an often callow contemporary scene the glamorous heyday of international café-cabaret, creating an atmosphere of infectious enthusiasm and intimacy with the audience that together move its members to feel like sophisticated citizens of the world. Julia’s evocative voice is as warm and glowing as her personality. This is a real artist who knowingly and lovingly shapes every phrase and colors every tone to elicit a maximum of feeling and expressiveness of mood in each song. With a worldwide repertoire including Russian romance and gypsy songs, French raconteur (Aznavour, Piaf, Brel), Greek, Persian, and Latin tunes, and, of course, perennial classics from the American songbook, Julia and her brilliant band ensemble deliver an ebullient musical experience with equal parts conviction, authority, and heart.

BEFORE

At an early age, Julia began her acting and singing career in Armenia, performing with various professional ensembles and theatrical groups throughout the former Soviet Union. Since her move to the United States in 1972, she has become well known as a singer of Armenian minstrel, folk and contemporary songs creating great enthusiasm in her audiences.  The combination of Julia’s moving, soulful, vibrant singing and her wide-ranging, diverse repertoire of songs and musical styles have touched the hearts of her audiences as well as garnered praise and rave reviews from numerous prominent artists and musicians. 

“Julia’s music makes you feel great, high spirited and cheerful. You leave the concert being fully recharged and ready for new life adventures; looking at things with renewed positive attitude….Her voice is fresh and beautiful, always in tune.  The repertoire is chosen extremely well.  Each song is a bull’s eye and speaks on a personal level to the whole audience.” Were comments made by Alexander Korsantia prize winning concert pianist and professor at the New England Conservatory after the last concert at the Regattabar. 

“Vocalist Julia performs with all the pizzazz of a headliner, as comfortable on stage as if she had been singing on Broadway, in clubs and in cabarets all her life,” says Victor Rosenbaum, concert pianist and composer, former president of Longy School of Music.  “Her voice is gorgeous – with a full palette of evocative colors – and she can put across every kind of song, from the sweetest innocent love song to hand-clapping dance numbers.   She is completely riveting on stage, and her back-up group led by her husband Sarkis at the piano, provides all the necessary support, rhythm and complementary color.” 

Jonathan McPhee, Music Director – Boston Ballet Orchestra and Longwood Symphony adds, “Julia Zerounian and her musicians perform music from Eastern Europe and America with a unique blend of cultures dominated by a warmth and personal quality that captivates the audience.  Even though many of the songs are in Russian and Armenian, her singing is so passionate and beautiful that the meaning is clear even without knowing the language.”

AFTER

Julia began her singing and acting career at an early age in Armenia, later performing with various professional ensembles and theatrical groups throughout the former Soviet Union. Since her move to the Boston area in 1972, she has become well-known to sophisticated urban audiences as an inimitable interpreter of modern American jazz tunes, international folk and contemporary songs, and Armenian minstrel. The combination of Julia’s soulful, vibrant singing and mastery of musical idioms has not only gained a large and loyal following but garnered rave reviews from prominent musicians and critics. A recent sampling:

Julia’s music makes you feel great, high spirited and cheerful. You leave the concert being fully recharged and ready for new life adventures; looking at things with renewed positive attitude…. Her voice is fresh and beautiful, always in tune. The repertoire is chosen extremely well. Each song is a bull’s eye and speaks on a personal level to the whole audience.

Alexander Korsantia, prize-winning concert pianist and professor at New England Conservatory

Vocalist Julia performs with all the pizzazz of a headliner, as comfortable on stage as if she had been singing on Broadway, in clubs and in cabarets all her life…. Her voice is gorgeouswith a full palette of evocative colorsand she can put across every kind of song, from the sweetest innocent love song to hand-clapping dance numbers. She is completely riveting on stage, and her back-up group led by her husband Sarkis at the piano provides all the necessary support, rhythm and complementary color.

Victor Rosenbaum, concert pianist and composer, former president of Longy School of Music

Julia Zerounian and her musicians perform music from Eastern Europe and America with a unique blend of cultures dominated by a warmth and personal quality that captivates the audience. Even though many of the songs are in Russian and Armenian, her singing is so passionate and beautiful that the meaning is clear even without knowing the language.

Jonathan McPhee, Music Director, Boston Ballet Orchestra and Longwood Symphony


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I selected the term “amorphous ego structure”, which describes Japanese cultural pattern and explains this types of psychopathology. The characteristics of the amorphous ego is as follows;

1) It shows ego contents of colloid like state, ambiguous desire, overlapping and loose structure of values system, chaotic object images, diffuse intentional behavior and undifferentiated psychic structure.

2) There are similar terms to describe these phenomena, such as “ambiguous”, “formless”, “fluid”, chaos”, “incoherent”, “unstructured”.

3) Kenzaburo Ohe made a speech titled “Japan, the ambiguous and I” at his Noble Prize reception lecture. He expressed in his paper “Aimaias  ambiguous. It is the same phenomena as I want to stress.

4) However, I chose to use the term “amorphous” as more a value-free and neutral. The term “Amorphous” is an engineering term. It means noncrystal and liquid state, of which molecule is not organized.

AFTER

In his Noble Prize for Literature address translated as “Japan, the Ambiguous, and Myself,” Kenzaburō Ōe emphasized the same phenomenon of ambiguity I want to stress. I use the term amorphous ego structure to characterize a type of psychopathology prevalent in Japanese culture. A person exhibiting this condition is often considered unstructured, incoherent, and even chaotic in matters of psychological identity, object relations, and behavior—in other words, as a personality manifesting a weak ego structure. This latter phrase is a value-laden one I wish to avoid by substituting a more neutral word. Amorphous, in fact, is a scientific term referring to a colloidal, unorganized molecular state. A person of amorphous ego structure, then, experiences ambiguous desires, an overlapping and loose system of values, diffuse behavior, and undifferentiated psychic contents.

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I will describe it with a diagram, using Freud’s model.

The two circles mean a boundary line with outer world which indicates ego boundary and a part of self which is an inner core. Its in-between state represents ego contents.

I put the term metaphorically the periphery of the ego boundary skin ego. The skin ego is sensitive to outer world and particularly to an interpersonal world. Structure of the core ego is ambiguous and self concept is diffuse. In addition, the ego contents are undifferentiated and colloid like state without any organized structure. Consequently, it shows traits such as socially weak self-assertion, few expressions of opinion, and clumsy at argument. It does not mean the opinion of his own does exist but does not expressed. Instead, it does not exist.

The followings are the characteristics of the skin ego:

1) It indicates the periphery of the ego boundary.

2) It manages dynamics of the interpersonal relations and functions as to follow the Sekentei, the decency, interpersonal code of behavior.

3) It maintains the ego contents in amorphous state.

4) The skin ego plays a role of container of ego contents.

If you compare the Japanese amorphous ego with the Western core ego, you will see the difference of the each trait clearly. “Amorphous ego structure” has traits that “the sense of self” is ambiguous, that ego contents are amorphous, and that the skin ego is fairly vigilant and sensitive (see, Fig.1).

AFTER

Figure 1 diagrams an amorphous personality structure using a Freudian ego model, represented by the large encompassing oval. Its thick boundary marks the periphery between the ego contents within and the outer world beyond. This periphery can be characterized metaphorically as a sensitive ego skin or persona interfacing between inner and outer worlds and in particular vigilantly managing interpersonal dynamics.

The ego skin serves as a container of ego contents insofar as it follows rules of sekentei, or decency, the Japanese culture-bound code of behavior informing all human relationships. In other words, self-containment in one’s behavior depends on sekentei, whose precepts are elaborated on later in this chapter.

Further, the ego skin serves to maintain the ego contents—depicted by the letters in between the central circle and the outer oval in Figure 1—in an amorphous state. At the center of the oval is a core ego that is itself ambiguous, resulting in a diffusive sense of self among certain Japanese. Such undifferentiated persons in their social functioning exhibit weak self-assertiveness, express few opinions, and are clumsy at argument. Note that this does not mean such persons have opinions of their own yet do not express them; rather, they simply do not have opinions of their own.

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On the contrary, the core western ego structure has traits that the self concept is clear, that ego contents are structured, and that the skin ego reacts selectively and is not indiscriminately vigilant and sensitive toward the interpersonal stimulus (see, Fig.2).

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The amorphous core ego and ambiguous sense of self among the Japanese can be better understood by contrast with the more organized ego structure and clearer sense of self in their Western counterparts, as depicted in Figure 2. However, as the diagram shows, the Western persona reacts more selectively toward and is less indiscriminately vigilant and sensitive in interpersonal relationships, in comparison with the more porous Japanese ego skin.

BEFORE

How differently are the core ego structure and the amorphous ego structure in interpersonal situations indicated? As for the core ego structure, we can say it becomes a confrontational relationship with others. They recognize others as “you” as a second person and the others relate to “me” as a second person. It is a relation of the first person vs. the second person, which is a “I and you” relationship. We can say the ego meets the other ego, or the self meets the other self. The relationship of “I and Thou” of Martin Buber could structurally indicate this linkage.

AFTER

How are the differences between the amorphous Japanese ego, on the one hand, and the organized Western ego, on the other, manifested in interpersonal behavior? It would appear that persons with a more Western-style organized ego structure form more confrontational relationships with others than do those with amorphous egos. In the former case, persons relate to each other as separate individuals, a meeting of self to self that may be characterized as an I–you relationship. To the extent that the I encounters a you out of genuine respect for this other’s unpredictable autonomy, without making social calculations or imposing past assumptions and judgments about this other’s nature, such a living relationship can be compared with the German philosopher Martin Buber’s exalted I–Thou mode of involvement between two people [AU: See “Martin Buber,” The Encyclopedia of Philosophy. But to the extent that Western interpersonal relationships take place between two defensive egos, a comparison of such with Buber’s I–Thou encounter is unwarranted.]

BEFORE

Figure 3 represents the interpersonal relations of core ego structure and Figure 4 represents the interpersonal relationships of the amorphous ego structure.

How is the case of the amorphous ego? Here are the characteristics of amorphous ego in the interpersonal relations which is different from the core ego structure.

1) Firstly, the field of interpersonal relations is dense which is filled the rule of SEKENTEI, culturally bound code of behavior. They have to consider much about who the speaker is, and how their relationship with the speaker is. The term “SEKENTEI (decency)” is used in ordinary life in Japan.

2) Secondly, the speaking partner, namely “you” is introjected into “I”, according to the rule of SEKENTEI. “I” talk to projected other, based on the introjected “you”. The other also replies to “projected me”, with same psychological maneuver. This relation can be said as “my - you” versus “your - I”, that is the second person versus second person relationship. A philosopher Arimasa Mori called it “binominal relationship”.

In Japan, if you don’t operate this “you-you” relationship well, your interpersonal relations would not proceed smoothly and end up in vain. For instance, if you use an expression style that you would use to your peer to someone senior to you, you are considered as rude or impertinent. It will hurt his/her feelings and will break off the talk. On the contrary, if you use honorific words to your junior persons, your relation will become clumsy.

AFTER

Figure 3 illustrates the confrontational pattern frequently found in interpersonal relationships between two persons possessing an organized ego structure. In contrast, Figure 4 depicts the nesting style often encountered in interpersonal relationships between two persons of amorphous ego structure.

In the case of Japanese interpersonal relationships between two persons with amorphous egos, behavior is determined by the sekentei cultural code introduced above. Each speaker must take into consideration the particular social status of the other in addressing and behaving toward him or her, which not only makes for dense interpersonal relations but entails a complex psychology at work in each person. That is, each person acting with great sensitivity and decency toward the other, following the rules of sekentei, introjects an image of the other into his or her own self. So I as an introjected you thereby interact with a projected you, just as you who have introjected me through a similar psychological maneuver then interact with a projected me.

The result is a you–you nested relationship—in the sense of a you within an I and an I within a you—that philosopher Arimasa Mori describes as a binomial one. In Japan this means that if you don’t handle this you–you relationship sensitively, your interpersonal relations will not proceed smoothly and will end in vain. For instance, if you use a style of expression that would properly be directed only toward a peer instead toward someone senior to you, you will be considered rude or impertinent. You will have hurt the other’s feelings and as a result he or she will break off the conversation. Similarly offensive, if you make the mistake of using honorific words toward persons junior to you, your relationship will be a clumsy one.


Annotated edits

"Many readers will surely recall the movie Annie Hall where the young boy Alvie is taken by his mother to a psychiatrist complaining of depression . . ." [Misplaced modifier]

"This was a revolutionary discovery, as previously it had been thought that there were 8 planets, that we circled around the Sun, and that we were at the center of the Milky Way."
More precisely:
"This was a revolutionary discovery since previously it was thought that the earth circled around the sun and that our solar system, comprising eight planets, was at the center of the Milky Way."

“In fact, neuroscience has been looking at the role of metaphor in facilitating memory recall in traumatic dissociation because of its ability to reestablish the collaboration of both the right and left hemispheres in the aftermath of trauma.” [Indefinite antecedent]